Good for a starter, Dood!
I listened to the start and I did expect some Megadeth-style thrash (that would've ruled). That was a great 'intro' and if you put in some rhythmic drums during the solo it would fucking rock.
Thanks for your vote, Sticktorture_United! You voted 5 for My first metal song, raising its score from 2.33 to 3.00.